E-Assttle writing

In class we have been making writing and I made it about a dog this is my writing:

The biggest and fattest dog - Daniel

This dog went to the beach his name’s fat bum…. Yes a really weird name, but it is what it is. Anyway he is a very happy dog and his owner took him to the beach and he played round everywhere… but he went too far in the water and he almost drowned but atleast he took swimming lessons and he swam back to shore. Later that day he found a gannet and he quickly dug his sharp teeth into it’s neck, then you heard a loud crack and saw it’s head turn ragdoll, the owner said “good boy” and the dog said “bark bark.” And they lived happily ever after… apart from the gannet.

Persuasive Writing

The other day we made persuasive writing, so we had to choose a description and chose we should be allowed to take phones to primary.... Sadly blogger won't let me put a picture of the writing in so I will have to copy and paste. I did 3 paragraphs and my conclusion as you can see below.

P1.

I think that kids in primary through to high school should carry phones with them because, how will they contact their parents or siblings to pick you up. What if they are lost and don’t know where to go from a friends house.

P2.

What if your bored on the bus or something,  you need some music or a game to play.

P3.

If the school burns down And you have your phone on you then call your parents to pick you up. If you don’t have your phone on you then you won’t be able to go home.

Conclusion

All i’m saying is just to let your students bring your phone to school, thank you for listening to my speech.

Score...

Me: 22

Sam: 22